Post by The Circle Television Network on May 26, 2019 8:15:10 GMT -5
Very enjoyable and innovative. I usually don't even like linked RPs, but I do acknowledge the limitations of doing fun stuff like this on our current board.
Not sure where to start...
I love collaborating on stuff as a lot of people already know. It makes the game a heck of a lot more fun. Though we were on opposite sides, there was a ton of collaboration here and I think it made the writing experience a lot more fun and took things in an enjoyable direction. As you already know, I love writing first person because it allows me to do a lot more from a development standpoint. Your use of it here was great and it really allows people to dive further into the character's frame of mind and see things from their perspective, no matter how odd.
Another thing is that this was a risk and that is what I find enjoyable about UGWC. As you know, I I've been working on fumes lately, but the only reason I don't pack it in is because UGWC gives writers a ton of freedom without penalizing you for it. Often the concept might not pay off, like the Roxy and Ang video game that I thought was brilliant, but at least you can try things like that and this here. We have seen a bit of this before, but this, I'd say is much more evolved.
Regardless of the outcome, it will be fun to see the next chapter for this character (beyond what we have already talked about) going forward. The same holds true for Kenzi, as this is a tipping point for her as well.
Post by angelicavaughn on May 30, 2019 8:06:32 GMT -5
I had a ot of fun with this, and it was a blast to read the whole thing through twice, choosing the different paths each time. Both had a very satisfying conclusion, and both were equally engaging despite being VERY different. Putting this next to Kenzi's own rp gave us a complete view of everything that happened leading up to this latch, so many different perspectives, and I enjoyed each one. Like I said with Kenzi's gfx, your way of telling branching stories is MORE than just a gimmick. It makes your story come alive. And I do love your approach of putting the reader in Aaron's shoes, allowing us to discover the story in the same way he would. And the flash-forward to Angie's own future is also very enjoyable, making we wonder what lies ahead for her. We know where she'll end up, it seems. But how will she get there? That'll be the biggest question.
Amazing stuff from the both of you! Honored to be a part of this, and my apologies for taking so long to provide the feedback this story deserves.
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