AHOY LINDSEY BUNNY, MY ARCH NEMESIS!! THE CAPTAIN IS OVERJOYED TO HAVE A CHANCE TO SETTLE OUR RIVALRY IN A LAST MAN STANDING MATCH!!
THE CAPTAIN GOT A KICK OUT OF YOUR FIGHTING PONIES, AND HE IS HAPPY TO SEE YOU ENJOYING THE TOYS OF YOUTH!! THE CAPTAIN HIMSELF HAS A COLLECTION OF HE MAN ACTION FIGURES!! HE HAS NO IDEA HOW THAT HELPS IN HIS MATCH, BUT GOOD LUCK NONETHELESS!!
"I can't wait to set sail with all my First Mates!!"
Post by Lord Hastings on Jun 10, 2018 20:10:50 GMT -5
This might be the best I've seen from you so far. There were some nice touches in this that I liked, notably the 80s references made such as My Little Pony, and my favorite moment was the ending line, which are the same words that Optimus Prime says right before his own "Last Man Standing" confrontation with Megatron in the same movie that Captain 80s takes his theme music from. Struck me as a strong ending.
I also suggest reconsidering the platform that you use to post. While we allow people to post their RPs on website, the one that you use makes it a bit challenging to read, between the small space that is utilized and the random ad links. Perhaps it's my browser. Regardless, I needed to copy and paste the work into a word document for it to be easier to read.
This might be the best I've seen from you so far. There were some nice touches in this that I liked, notably the 80s references made such as My Little Pony, and my favorite moment was the ending line, which are the same words that Optimus Prime says right before his own "Last Man Standing" confrontation with Megatron in the same movie that Captain 80s takes his theme music from. Struck me as a strong ending.
I also suggest reconsidering the platform that you use to post. While we allow people to post their RPs on website, the one that you use makes it a bit challenging to read, between the small space that is utilized and the random ad links. Perhaps it's my browser. Regardless, I needed to copy and paste the work into a word document for it to be easier to read.
I'm pretty sure it's your browser or something because, I've never expierenced an 'random ad link'... the only ad I've ever seen was right below the 'black bar' background thing the forum names are on.
